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Sanctum

To breathe peace,
True solitude.
Calm the waters
And feel something
Breathe in.

Protection
Safety, quiet,
Whatever it is
Nothing torments,
Solace.

To escape
Asphyxiate,
Cruelty and hate
Crushing terror.
Breathe out.
One of the two crappy poems that wrote themselves. More or less. I know, I was going to post them a week ago, but I'm gonna go ahead and space them out a little. That way I can post again in a little bit, since I can't scan anything in at the moment.

For the record, I hate trying to classify these things. I put it in Horror/Macabre (yes, again), because that's the best spot for darker stuff... despite the fact that this particular poem really isn't horror-filled or morbid. But it is somwhat angsty and lonely, so this--unfortunately--was the best description I could find.

Also, it's fixed because I bothered with rythm and meter, but didn't use a formal style. It's a little too organized for the 'open' category. ...There's organization...count the syllables, or something. Alright, I'm done whining.

...Open to interpretation. In fact, I'd sort of like to hear your interpretations. I'm curious.
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Chronoline Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2006  Hobbyist Photographer
i like it....i should get around to putting some of my poems up one day, one glorious day
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k-hallowseve Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
One glorious day... :P

You should do it; I don't know anyone (personally) who regularly posts poetry.
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Chronoline Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2006  Hobbyist Photographer
i have to find my orinted versions though, my computer crapped itself so i may have lost all of my old work
poetry, stories and art
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k-hallowseve Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Urk! That's horrible. I know what that's like >.< Some things will be lost forever.
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Chronoline Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2006  Hobbyist Photographer
hopefully i can get something off my hard drive but maybe not.
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k-hallowseve Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
They have programs available to salvage stuff from your hard drive, but I have no idea how much they cost and such.
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Chronoline Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2006  Hobbyist Photographer
hmmm...must salvage. My masterpieces noooo! ahh, they weren't all that good, but i could make them better damn it!
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k-hallowseve Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yeah, I'd look into it... unless you want to start over... >.< That really, really sucks.
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shadowmonster Featured By Owner May 17, 2006
Feild of paper flowers. *PASHING!* Oh looks i'm in your brain now, whatcha gonna do?

AHem, sorry. That was random :B
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k-hallowseve Featured By Owner May 17, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:rofl: Where did THAT come from? That was random. But it made me laugh.
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shadowmonster Featured By Owner May 18, 2006
Was meaning to be deep, but then I just thought about how I CAN READ YOUR MIND and a *pashing* was born. Like lighting on your brian, but not as damaging. :giggle:

Plus it's me, did you really have to wonder?
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k-hallowseve Featured By Owner May 18, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
;P Stop reading my mind! And *pashing* kinda tingles, like brain-freeze.
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shadowmonster Featured By Owner May 21, 2006
Ooo!! Okay, so what's *Ba-kow!* feel like?
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k-hallowseve Featured By Owner May 26, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
...A lot like 'ba-koom' or 'bomm!' (bless Toriyama's sound-effects), actually. :P Hey, remember 'WOK!'? Hint: "Sam Ashmore says, 'do the dance of the unknown otomonopoeia!'"
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shadowmonster Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2006
Hey, all I remember is "SHA SHASHASHA SHA.. TOUCH ME CLOVER!" As far as otomonopeoia, I woundn't remember.
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k-hallowseve Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It's in my sketchbook. You'll know it when you see it.
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fripturici Featured By Owner May 15, 2006
although it's not exactly macabre but the sad feeling could put it into this cathegory
i think that this poem might represent the fact that humans take what's good from the world and give back only the worst
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k-hallowseve Featured By Owner May 15, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I like that interpretation. :) And yeah, the poetry categories are too broad... but I rant on that every time I post some. It's fun to complain about it. :P
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Digicowboy Featured By Owner May 15, 2006
That sure is a poem!
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k-hallowseve Featured By Owner May 15, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Really? I'm never sure of whether or not this stuff even makes any sense. Thanks. :)
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Digicowboy Featured By Owner May 17, 2006
You should see my poems. :P Now THERE is a lesson in suckitude.
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k-hallowseve Featured By Owner May 17, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You'd have to post them, first... ;)

And I doubt it; I've seen what kind of writing you're capable of.

For the record, 'suckitude' should be a real word.
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color-grey Featured By Owner May 13, 2006
i wont reply to poems, mainly cus I don't like reading things.... but ah what ever, any way I'm sure it's good and all, im just lazy and sh*t so, buck em'
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k-hallowseve Featured By Owner May 15, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
So, you're willing to leave a comment saying you're not going to read it, when it woudn't have taken that much more time to just read the dumb thing? Eh, whatever, it's a crap poem, anyway. Hmm, the logic is flawless.
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color-grey Featured By Owner May 16, 2006
oh, well, if you think it's crap, why you woring about it?
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k-hallowseve Featured By Owner May 16, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You know, you could have just lied and said you read it... "It's... interseting. Yeah; that's it." :P
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color-grey Featured By Owner May 17, 2006
i could, but it's against my better juggment to lie to a freind, i'd rather imbaress them :clap:
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k-hallowseve Featured By Owner May 17, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Of course, how could I have questioned your integrity? :sarcasm:
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color-grey Featured By Owner May 18, 2006
servs you right...
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k-hallowseve Featured By Owner May 18, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Of course. I should have seen your odd behavior coming. :P
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